I read somewhere to give life to abstractions by substituting concrete images that suggest the feeling. I’ve decided to put that advice into practice with every other chapter. The newest one I wrote in revising Chapter One again is about Hada. Instead of saying she felt guilty, I wrote:
Guilt pinched at her heart and then hid somewhere, maybe in her bones.
It takes a while to think of feelings taking action, but it’s fun and avoids overused words.
